Hey this is my first draft. Its a Pokemon fan fic. The main character is the son of the main character from the Manga/Anime series Pokemon and Game Boy game Pokemon Red/Blue/Green.
He is about to set out on his Pokemon journey and its about that and I guess him having to deal with his dads death and his fame. adventuring and moving forward after being down about stuff.
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Like no one ever was
He awoke early having not slept well during the night. It
was his birthday today but that was the furthest thing from his mind. Laying there
in the early morning darkness of his room listening to the sounds of the neighbourhood,
he heard a van across the road, park and someone exit. It must be Mr Rimu he
thought to himself, Graveyard shift.
Aka came padding in and jumped on the bed and settled at the
foot of the bed as he usually did. His thoughts immediately went out to his
Mother and younger sister Rata and his faithful dog that he would be leaving
behind.
It had been hard on the family since the death of his father
at the hands of Team Rocket. Though he
had come of age the decision to delay his journey was something he never gave a
second thought to. Working at the local convenience store he was able to help with the bills
and look after his sister when his mum had to work. Even though it had been two
years since, his loss was still felt. Framed pictures lined the walls, trophies
and badges of all types were on display throughout the house. A testament to
the legend that he had become .
Living with the constant reminder didn’t help at times and
despite his passing the expectation though never expressly spoken in his presence
was that he become great like his old man Satoshi.
A good start to your story. It introduces the characters well, apart from the fact I don't know the main characters first name :( slight grammar issues but nothing a proof read cant fix. Good job, can't wait to see what comes out next. Pokemon is such a good idea for a fanfic!
ReplyDeleteThanks Monique! yeah I immediately saw some issues after posting. I haven't mentioned his name yet as I couldn't decide what it should be.I'm still undecided.
DeleteDidn't think anyone would do Pokemon for a fan fiction but this was very good. Although this is just a draft i believe you're off to a good start. I agree with Monique you should introduce or mention the main character's name but I'm sure you will as this is only the tip of the iceberg. A little editing will be great but overall its a great start and looking forward to the next part of your fan fiction.
ReplyDeleteThanks Lofa, I changed my mind several times. Even the story has changed 2-3 times since the draft.I'm trying to simplify things and its not easy.
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