“Let
Deaclon Potters death simply remind us of the cowards who are responsible for
the attacks on our city!!” declared Conrad Grayson as the crowd cheered.
Jack sweating and shaking trying to quickly load his gun
upstairs
“let us rather see his sacrifice as an inspiration to face our own insert future in strength and unity, coz one thing is certain, thanks to the courageous revolve of people of New York. I will be leading us into the most exciting future this state will ever know” Conrad carries on as the crowd become more vocal.
“let us rather see his sacrifice as an inspiration to face our own insert future in strength and unity, coz one thing is certain, thanks to the courageous revolve of people of New York. I will be leading us into the most exciting future this state will ever know” Conrad carries on as the crowd become more vocal.
Jack aims riffle at Conrad, just as pulling the trigger
Emily bursts through the doors with the faintest of voice “Jack don’t do it”
Jack frightened by Emily stares at her in despair and quickly refocuses on the task “Emily, go away. This has nothing to do with you!" demanded Jack
Jack frightened by Emily stares at her in despair and quickly refocuses on the task “Emily, go away. This has nothing to do with you!" demanded Jack
A timid Emily replies
“It has everything to do with me….” sorely looking at Jack with tears streaming
down her face. “If only I had left you from the beginning none of this would
have happened” at this point she walks around to be at gun point.
“Don’t throw your life away because of the choices I have made” as her voice begins to crack, desperately glancing into Jacks eyes for him to lower his gun.
A confused Jack replies, “What chocies?! What are you
talking about!!?” glancing at Emily for a fraction of a second before
refocusing on his target.
Desperate for his attention, Emily sighs “Jack, look at me”
Desperate for his attention, Emily sighs “Jack, look at me”
At this point Jack thoroughly scrutinizes Emily. As they lock eyes, he has a flashback of their childhood.
“Deep down inside you’ve always known the truth” cries Emily. Before he could unravel the mystery, Emily reveals that she is Amanda Clark!
As they have a moment to themselves. Jack in disbelief, walks
around waving his gun in the air stressed at the situation that just occurred.
Jack lashes out saying “So this whole time everything was a lie? My wife? My kid? My life? You? Me? Why!?”
Jack lashes out saying “So this whole time everything was a lie? My wife? My kid? My life? You? Me? Why!?”
As the cheers from the crowd fades, Conrad notices Jack and
Emily. The crowd notices the change in the panic-stricken Conrad as he swivels
at the site of jack and his gun.
Everyone begins to panic, screaming and shouting alarms are being set off. Police rush upstairs to arrest jack.
Everyone begins to panic, screaming and shouting alarms are being set off. Police rush upstairs to arrest jack.
Daniel notices his fiancé being escorted by police and races after Emily to check on her. Emily ignores
him telling him to get lost as she follows jack and the police outside.
At the prison Jack is taken in for questioning, sitting in
frustration trying to make sense of his life until now. He knew he would go insane
if he suffered another setback. With thoughts haunting him as he runs his agitating
fingers through his hair.
Emily enters the room “Come on, get up we’re leaving”.
“I’m not going anywhere with you” Jack replies grinding his teeth.
Emily sighs “come on Jack! We don’t have much time.”
Jack punches the table with his two hands and shouts at Emily “Time for what!? you betrayed me, you lied about who you were, about who Amanda was. I don’t know who you are anymore!”
A frightened Emily cries out “please just give me the chance
to explain. But I can’t do it here” staring into Jacks eyes, his eyes filled
with anger and frustration. After much pleading Jack finally decides to leave
with Emily desperate for the truth.
Emily and Jack arrive at Emily’s beach house in the Hamptons
as they enter through the doors arguing as almost as they were a married
couple.
“I’ve lost my wife, who I thought was you and now I have lost my brother! What am I supposed to do now?”
“I’ve lost my wife, who I thought was you and now I have lost my brother! What am I supposed to do now?”
Emily comforts him and sits him down with tears streaming down their faces. Emily takes hold of Jack frail hands.
“Listen Jack this may not make sense to you now but you deserve to know the truth”.
Emily starts to unravel the truth about her and why she has returned to the Hampton's as Emily Thorn instead of Amanda Clarke her true identity.
As this conversation takes place across from the beach house is Victoria Grayson and her long lost son Patrick looking down at the beach house as Victoria explains to Patrick about her relationship with David Clarke the father of Emily Thorne the real Amanda Clarke who is deceased.
Back at the beach house after an enduring and emotional
conversation Jack has now decided to jump on board and join forces with Emily as
they prepare to take down the Grayson’s, starting with the mysterious bombing of
Grayson global that claimed Declan’s life.
As they carefully examine the footage of the incident they
discover that Conrad Grayson was behind the bombing and learnt that
there was no such thing as the "Initiative Group" rather they were people benefitting off people fears.
While analysing the footage Emily’s facial expression changes as she notices a man in the crowd.
“Wait, wait Jack, rewind that” as if she just saw a ghost.
Jack rewinds and the both discover a man that looks like David Clarke.
They process the image and it matches the identity to David Clarke they both shocked and shaken by this amazing discovery of David Clarke.
”That’s impossible my father is still alive”. states Emily in disbelief
While analysing the footage Emily’s facial expression changes as she notices a man in the crowd.
“Wait, wait Jack, rewind that” as if she just saw a ghost.
Jack rewinds and the both discover a man that looks like David Clarke.
They process the image and it matches the identity to David Clarke they both shocked and shaken by this amazing discovery of David Clarke.
”That’s impossible my father is still alive”. states Emily in disbelief
Great fanfiction. I haven't seen the show revenge but this definitely gives a great insight into the drama and storyline of the show. The whole fanficion keeps the reader interested through every word and the reader can feel as if they are watching an episode of the show, compared to just reading it. The characters are well introduced and this stays constant throughout the story. The reader gets an idea of what each characters personality is like and can even imagine how they would look. The grammar of this fanfiction is great with only a few spelling mistakes, which is fine considering its a first draft. The only con with this fanfiction would be that it does jump from scene to scene with not too much explanation between the change. All in all a great start to your fanfiction, can't wait to see the final product.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback very encouraging and will use the points you have pointed out here.
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